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25 September 2009 @ 07:12 am
Fresh Face - Lucil/Elma (FFX)  
Fandom: FFX
Pairing/Characters: Elma/Lucil (pre)
Title: Fresh Face
Prompt: Red
Word count: 300
Rating: G

It wasn't against Crusader regulations.

Her garb was more practical than those bare-assed blitz uniforms some Kilikans enlisted in. That was fine for infantry: any knight knew that speed and agility were another kind of armor. But they'd be chapped and whimpering after a day in the saddle.

The girl wore bright red that a dual-horn could spot a league off, plus a starry-eyed "Pick me, Captain!" grin that Lucil would be sorry to dampen. Blue beads on her headband meant she came from a noble family, although she didn't boast of it. The kilt was unusual, but the girl brought chaps and a good riding seat. She handled the obstacle courses well and without complaint.

Lucil found herself masking a smile whenever the cadet came by, winded but eager long after the other recruits were grumbling that they'd signed up to fight fiends, not coddle chocobos.

"Next, ma'am?"

"The same, but ride backwards. A needed skill in retreat."

"Retreat, ma'am?" It was the first plaintive note in the cadet's voice all day.

"Yes, Elma. When Sin comes, our job becomes survival. Else there would be none to kill the spawn it leaves."

"Right, Captain!" Another breathless salute.

The other cadets tittered when Elma reversed her seat. The mocking began in earnest after the first blitzball sent her flying face down in the turf. But she only laughed, hopped up, whistled the chocobo back, remounted and charged off again, gaining a few paces before her next tumble.

Red. Lucil would have to speak to her about its effect on dual-horns later. But for now, it helped her spot the girl on the field and mark her progress.

The trials for Djose were rigorous, but Lucil was looking forward to one new addition to the Djose Chocobo Knights.
Mr. Ite: Writingmr_ite on September 25th, 2009 10:54 pm (UTC)
This is great, Auronlu! A much needed fleshing out of two minor characters. I suppose that it is rated G because of the near-invisible yuri tones. It seemed to me more of a professional caring about her recruits. If this was a prologue to a longer tale about these two... oh my gosh, can it be???

Yuri qualifications aside, I loved this fic. You always write with such a detailed knowledge of the game-world, but not in a pretentious way that only the elite would know. The bit about the Dual Horns was perfectly succinct -- you said just enough to give any lay person a basic mis-en-scene of the monster, it's habits and it's threat level, but you didn't over-explain it, instead placing it as a common part of Djose. Very commendable.
You also manage to capture the characters of both Elma and Lucil with very few words. You iz good drabbler.
Helluin: lucilauronlu on September 25th, 2009 11:18 pm (UTC)
Thank you very much for the detailed review and high praise! I'm blushing. Your vocabulary choices in review are more apt? exact? fresh? than my own.

You're right, this isn't exactly yuri, but it is prologue. I've written a couple other pieces implying a relationship or proto-relationship between them. But apart from my Love Her and Despair serial, where their closeted but fiercely devoted relationship is one of many threads in a larger saga, I have never actually written them in bed together. Even then, they conducted most of their "off duty" exercises after a tasteful fade to black.

I started to write something steamy for the "lightning" prompt, but couldn't piece it together. Sooner or later I'll be more explicit; Lucil/Elma has become my second favorite pairing.

Edited at 2009-09-26 01:55 am (UTC)
sissyhiyahsissyhiyah on September 27th, 2009 09:18 pm (UTC)
Bah! Insanely jealous, I am. (and I've been possessed by Yoda, it seems)

While I adore your wonderful smutilicious bang-bang fics, I love these even more. I 'm really digging the lusty-yet-oh-so-well-behaved Lucil vibe. Entering major geek-zone here, but this reminded me so much of that delightfully teasing mentor/student elationship between Xena and Gabriel.

You could stop whatever it is you're doing and write a few more, you know. I wouldn't mind.

Really. That would kick ass.